However, when I started researching to write my sonnet I was quite excited to start writing! So here’s my sonnet! I am excited to get feedback on it. I feel pretty new at all of this, but you have to start somewhere right?
Sonnet 1
From a Father’s ached forehead I
sprang, formed.
Yet with Father beside, I couldn’t
fear;
For I his gift, shields and bolts I
adorned.
No strength did derive from a
mother dear.
I catch commonalities of the owl,
Endlessly perfect, snowy white, clever
Defending my nest against all
prowlers.
Patient, perching, and spiraling, I
ever
Soar, yet standing safe as an olive
tree.
Pure branches stretch from my
extremities,
Resilience in my roots. I can’t
foresee,
A loss able to swipe my entities.
Behold, I Athena,
Goddess of War,
Protect my home and live forever more!
So I picked to write about Greek Mythical Goddess Athena for many reasons…First of all I was unsure which myth to write about, and when I came across the Greek Gods my love for them was rekindled! I have always especially loved Athena. She is strong, compassionate and loves her family. She is also pure and confident; everything a woman could be!
It was a fun to research and write a little about her. Let me know what you think!
This sonnet has a lot of really great description and I loveeee how you didn't reveal who it actually was about until the very end. The only suggestion I could give would be look at where the accents fall on the words in the iambic pentameter. It's super hard!
ReplyDeleteYou write very elegantly. I felt Athena's gumption in your words! I really like that your use of the owl flowed with your writing. It wasn't a random interjection, but a continuous effort to help the reader understand how Athena is like the owl. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI love this sonnet, especially the volta at the end, in which Athena reveals her identity. Beautiful visual aid, as well! The lines with enjambment work really well, I would love to see even more of that (it's something I want to use more of as well)!
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